My
family and I were laying on the river-side relaxing. It was getting
later in the day, and the temperature was cooling down from 80°F to
about 75°F. Little did we know our day was about to get a whole lot
worse. My two year old brother, Grant, launched himself off the shore,
sinking faster than I thought possible. How naive we were, to think a little toddler wouldn’t do something stupid. It
was like my brain malfunctioned, I didn’t know what to do and I was
quite dumbfounded at the time to what had happened. My father’s voice
rang out like a gunshot
“Who is going af-..”
“I’ll
go”, my Mom hastily spat out the words before diving in the ominously
calm, dark water. If you don’t know my mom, she seems very calm but she
is a very nervous person, and like all mothers she has that sixth sense
that tells when her children are in danger. She was practically in the
water before Grant. My mom isn’t the strongest swimmer around, she
doesn't even like to swim all the way across the river to the jumping
rocks,but I think the adrenaline with her baby being in danger gave her
an inhuman amount of strength and courage. Time slowed to a stop. Mom
was underwater searching for what seemed like eternity, the fear
twisting a sickly black knot inside my stomach, poisoning the vacation. I
could see her under the water looking and feeling around for Grant, the
bubbles floating up to the surface and exploding, my brother’s lifeline
slowly ticking away. I could hear my heart beating in my ears, and the
adrenaline gave me superhuman senses. I could taste the dusty dry air. I
could feel the atmosphere buzzing with the tide of mosquitoes that come
with the dark, and worst of all I could see the events unfolding in
front of me. I could tell my dad was torn between staying on shore or
joining the frantic search for my brother. I remember thinking to
myself: My brother is so little, let him live through this safely. Time was running out,
“Dad, can babies hold their breath?” I quietly asked
My father muttered an unenthusiastic”yes.”
Grant just wanted to swim like the rest of us, but he doesn’t know how, and he doesn’t float. Then Mom plunged out of the water like a superhero with my brother in her arms and time snapped back into place.
“Wow, you saved him!”, I said breaking the silence. Mom is so great, she saved my little baby brother,
my four year old consciousness thought. My mom in all her heroic glory
sat down with her baby boy cradled in her arms. The sweet smell of the
air and beauty of the impending dusk seemed to mockingly laugh at us, as
if to tell us about how our day had almost come to a tragic end.
My dad said what we were all thinking, “let’s go back to the campsite, make dinner, and try to relax.”
That
was my summer vacation nine years ago. My family was out camping in
Petrolia, California. It was a majestic day, with the sun beating down
like mighty Hephaestus, with Petrolia in the grips of his furnace. I can
remember the conversations before that terrible turn of events.
“I’m so glad we could take this family trip, I love being together” my Dad said blissfully.
“
Yeah, and the weather is so hot it’s great, it makes the water so
refreshing.” My mom replied. At four years old I was quite talkative,
but I have never really told anyone about this situation. Even at four I
had a photographic memory and so to this day I am still haunted by that
traumatic incident. I don’t hate Petrolia, in fact we have gone back
many times after that event, but slowly it has seem to pull it’s
tendrils of memories and experiences out of our lives. We haven't gone
back there in at least five years and I am glad,because I think even if
it is a nice relaxing place, it will always be the place where my
brother almost drown. Despite that I am still haunted by this
experience. It seems like just a memory now, and in my minds eye it
could easily be a very realistic dream instead of a real life event.
Great sensory details and descriptions of what was going on. I like how you made it seem like time stopped.
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ReplyDeleteyou explained it well and I could see it while i was reading
ReplyDeletevery good descriptions, I could picture every thing! very well thought through.
ReplyDeletevery good with starting in the action.I could even see the scene
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